punishment or play?

[smackedfan22]

What were you two thinking Sinclair shouted angrily. You two geniuses left a known rapist in a room with a teenage girl. What were you thinking. Look we... silence!! he shouted as he cut of the beautiful Greek women that stood in front of him. Your lucky i don't fire your asses right now but unfortunately for me the mayor likes you two So congratulations as a punishment for your stupidity you two idiots have earned a weekend washing company cars. What Stella shouted in disbelief. you herd me Bonesera he said and without further adue he stormed out of her office. She turned to her partner and best friend of nearly 13 years and smiled. So looks like you get to hang out with me all weekend. Oh joy he teased. She swatted his arm playfully and retorted hey consider yourself the Lucky one.

Up and at em Stella said as she woke Mac up the next morning. He had dozed of in the front seat of her BMW convertible. Do we really have to do this he pleaded as he looked into her gorgeous emerald eyes. Yes she replied allowing the sadness to show in her usually joyous eyes. As they climbed out of the car he eyed her denim shorts and white tank top. What no bikini he teased. In your dreams Taylor she replied giving him an eye roll. Hey i can wish can't i he laughed. Come on she giggled lets get to work. They worked in silence for a half an hour until Mac got bored of throwing water on the shiny black vehicles decided it would be more fun to aim for his partner. He grabbed a bucket of soapy water and snuck up behind Stella and poured the bucket all over her head. Maaaac she shrieked as she tried to find something to throw back at him. For the next few minutes they chased each other around soaking each other with buckets of warm water. Stella slipped on the now muddy ground and fell backwards into the puddle of mud. As she fell she grabbed Macs hand and pulled him on top of her. For a moment emerald meat aqua and they gazed lovingly into each others eyes until he wrapped her in his warm embrace and began to kiss her passionately. I love you Stella Bonesera I always have he mumbled. I love you to Mac Taylor she murmured before there lips met again. After they kissed for a few more moments before he said you think we washed enough cars for one day he said with a smirk, Oh definitely she replied now why don't you be a nice boss and come help me wash off this mud. I would love to he said then the happy couple walked into the sunset hand in hand.


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[smackedfan22]

sorry the title is soooooooooo lame and i did notice the typo after i published it but pleeeeeeeeeease respond i need to know if i should wright more

[Sophia]

Well, I'll be honest.
It's a bit unreal, that the heads of the crime lab make a mistake like this and this is the punishment, but it's not bad.
But you definitely should use the usual FF style. You should use this sign " for the talk part at least, because it's hard to read this way.

But all in all, you should continue and with some practice you could write better and better stories. Nobody starts with perfect stories.